2/20 In-class Activity

Appealing to Audience

The situation: you, a 20-year-old sophomore, have recently discovered that you’re pregnant. The father of your child (a guy you dated for a year) dumped you for a Hooters waitress a week ago. After much soul-searching, you decide to keep the baby and pursue your BS degree in nursing. But you know that you’ll need help; you’ll need to write a letter to your audience (listed below) to inform them of your pregnancy and ask for assistance.

 

Your audience: Your Mama

 

Pathos:

Why would your mother be resistant to assist you or welcome this news?

No mother wants their 20 year old daughter to have a child.

 

What emotions might you evoke in your letter?

 Mercy, Forgiveness, Acceptance, and the need for Support.

 

Is there anything your mother values that might incline her to help you?

 Her hatred for abortion may incline her to help you.

 

Logos:

 

There are many ways to say “I’m pregnant”—how will you phrase it in your letter?

 Mother, I have so bad news and I don’t want you to overreact, I’m pregnant.

 

 

Are there any disputed/unclear terms or facts that you will want to address in your letter?

The fact that the father has already moved on and dumped me last week for a hooters waitress.

 

 

Name one detail (from the summary or your invention) that you want to make sure is in the letter.

 That I have decided to keep the baby and raise him by yourself.

 

Name one thing you will purposefully, tactfully exclude.

 How it long ago it happen, where it happen, and the exact name of the father because the mother might

 

What exactly are you asking for?

 Help.

 

 

Ethos: (your character and credibility)

What side of your character do you want this audience to see?

 The brave, courageous, and bold personalities traits you uphold.

 

What will you do to get this persona across?

 Emphasis that your keep it and still going to school, and that you plan on working through it.

 

 

Each group should compose one letter. Either write the letter here, or write the name of the person who has the letter in his/her portfolio. Remember that you can go beyond the story outline, creating whatever details, names, etc. that will enrich your plea.

 

 Mother,

Unfortunately, I come barring terrible news. Recently my ex-boyfriend and I decided to have unprotected sex and I have now become pregnant. I know this may sound bad… but I plan on keeping the child because I believe it is the right thing to do. I am going to continue on the nursing path to my best ability and try to finish college with a degree. I already know what you’re going to say, so don’t. I know it’s a dumb, irresponsible, and idiotic choice and that your disappointed in me, but honestly, in a time such as this, I need your support and acceptance. I understand that it is asking a lot but I would be extremely nice to know someone else cared besides me.

 

 

Sources:
http://www.world-heart-federation.org/fileadmin/user_upload/children/documents/factsheets/Factsheet_Unhealthy_diet.pdf
Provides plenty of facts that can help support the risks of unhealthy eating.
Qoutes from source:

Unhealthy diets are linked to four of

the world’s top ten leading risk factors

causing death: high blood pressure, high

blood glucose, overweight and obesity

and high cholesterol.      

 

High consumption of saturated fat and

trans-fats is linked to heart disease, the

number one cause of death globally.

http://www.ncdalliance.org/node/42
Provides facts and percentages that can help enforce or influence the audience away from unhealthy eating.
Qoutes from source:
At least 2.6 million people each year die as a result of being overweight or obese.

Eating a healthy diet, increasing physical activity and avoiding tobacco use can prevent:

• - 80% of premature heart disease,
• - 80% of type 2 diabetes cases, and
• - 40% of cancers.

  

Blog 7: 
Overview questions over Ms. Tamra Garstka SRC issues. 
In her essay Ms. Tamra Garstka brings to the public's attention an issue worth discussing when she argues that the way the SRC charges and arranges their deals is to expensive and unaffordable for any college student. I agree, that the expenses that follow when looking to do something other than lift, play basketball, or other racket sports. By including other classes along with the already offered activities it would allow the student to interact in many different types of activities. Some points of evidence that would be able to strengthen her argument would be some first-hand evidence such as interviews with physically active people in which you could ask their opinion on the matter. Along with firsthand interviews, proposing strong points by comparing benefits and downfalls of each idea would help the writer get their point across to the reader. In this particular paper the writer is reaching out to a wide group of people, anyone who has a physically active life and enjoys saving money. Therefore, reaching out to this massive group of people is an intelligent choice made by Ms. Garstka. In some ways the idea can appeal to the the audiences pathos. Moreover, this argument can appeal to their pathos by making their wallets happier and bodies happier with reasonable and fair deals. The writers ethos is questionable but she is a victim of the overpayment for classes. In which, makes her a firsthand victim who would be considered not an expert on the subject but someone with a experience with this issue.  I feel this is a decent proposal for our proposal assignment because it is an obtainable goal with an educated approach for a solution to the problem. Some things I would like to do differently such as: interviews, concrete evidence, and stronger compare and contrast between the two subjects. As stated early, the writer uses very basic information obtainable by anyone and firsthand experience with the issue to support her idea. This is not a bad approach but interview and comparisons could drastically improve this paper. Throughout this paper the author does many things very well and her point is clearly made in her writing. The ability to state an idea, access the problem, propose a solution, compare and contrast view points. These are all important factors of a proposal assignment  in which her essay encompasses all but a comparison which would have turned this B paper in a low A. Overall I feel this paper is well done and clear.